I debated with myself a lot weather to write you a replay or not. now that I have decided to write this anyway I hope you see this eventually.
as a reader you just lost me.
mainly because the scenario goes against my own truths as a person- I do not connect to this development as well as I have to the story parts I read so far.
I think you could have kept me interested despite my inner disagreement if this part of the story was stronger.
from experience I know how exhilarating and how private such an experience is and if that strength of emotion would have been conveyed in this chapter than I would have something to identify with, even if I do not agree with the interpretation a child gives to he experience.
to be clear- I have to objection to the reasoning or the importance this is to the main character.
my objection is to the stereotyping of the plot. and even stereotypes can be tolerable- if they are strong enough.
after all, the reason they are stereotypes is that they happen a lot.
I debated with myself a lot weather to write you a replay or not. now that I have decided to write this anyway I hope you see this eventually.
as a reader you just lost me.
mainly because the scenario goes against my own truths as a person- I do not connect to this development as well as I have to the story parts I read so far.
I think you could have kept me interested despite my inner disagreement if this part of the story was stronger.
from experience I know how exhilarating and how private such an experience is and if that strength of emotion would have been conveyed in this chapter than I would have something to identify with, even if I do not agree with the interpretation a child gives to he experience.
to be clear- I have to objection to the reasoning or the importance this is to the main character.
my objection is to the stereotyping of the plot. and even stereotypes can be tolerable- if they are strong enough.
after all, the reason they are stereotypes is that they happen a lot.