The Alien

The door to the small apartment burst open. Jack threw the crimson haired man inside and shut it quickly behind him.
“What the hell were you thinking?” He asked in the loudest whisper he could muster. He knew the alien was letting him do this. With more than thrice his own speed and strength, Velorum could rip his head apart and be out the door before he himself hit the floor. The alien wanted to be reprimanded. He half sat, half fell on the moldy sofa and stared out the shuttered window into the dark city scene.
“You are supposed to be keeping a low profile. Care to explain what happened in the alley?”
“I’m pissed off!” He yelled at Jack who immediately grabbed the collar of his jacket and thrust him back down into his seat.
“Yeah? We’re all pissed off. Now deal with it. And shut up.”
“You don’t know the half of it,” Velorum said, his voice crumbling to a whisper.
“Well, why don’t you fucking enlighten me?” Jack said and crashed in the opposite couch.
“Do you know why I’m here? Why I’m really here?”
Jack’s head fell on his open hand, he looked like he just lost a round of poker to a bluff. “I guess it’s not to fix your ship and get out.”
“Hardly. I was cast out of my own planet. Thrown away for trying to tell the truth. But they didn’t believe me. They said I was delusional, hysteric, what do you call it when you’re disturbed by a battle?”
“Post Traumatic Stress Disorder?” Jack said.
“Yes, that one or something like it. But it wasn’t that. It was a battle near a quasi-space hole. We were trying to defend it for it was the only way to the Jodantokai.”
“The what?” Jack interrupted.
“The Wise from Above. That’s how we call them. You probably heard of them as Little Green Men. They prefer Ariloulaleelay.”
“Little Green Men…” Since meeting the alien, Jack’s mind opened to so many new possibilities. “Ok. So what happened?”
“During the fight, I went through the hole. We had to defend it until it closed. One of the enemy craft managed to get passed us and I had to chase it down. I managed to destroy it but it closed on me so I was in with no way back. I took my ship to the Arilou homeworld and they let me in! Understand this: they never let anyone in. I went there and talked to them. No drones or sentries or nothing. I spoke to a representative. An ambassador or something. He told me the whole story. How they took us from Earth centuries ago and how they brought us to our new colony.”
“You’re from Earth?!” Jack could barely keep his seat.
“I’m not. But my race originally is. Right now we are as different from you, as you are different from a gorilla.”
Jack twisted his face and relaxed again. “I’ll try and not take offense.”
“So I was there and I asked them why. We’ve sent delegations before but it was considered uncivilized to question their motives. That is the main reason why my people banished me, for breaking taboos.”
“So… Why?”
“To protect you.”
“To protect me?”
“All of you, the human race. I asked the wise ones, one of the most advanced races in the galaxy if not the most, and that’s what they fucking told me. They dragged us half way across the sector and into the middle of the galactic mayhem so we could be your fucking guardians, so we could keep you safe from the rest of the fucking monsters out there who would sooner eat you with cooked Spathi entrails than shake your hand.” Velorum was standing now, his voice rising in volume with every sentence. Jack could feel the increase in temperature and was starting to fear what was to come next. “That’s what I said to the counsel but they wouldn’t accept the fact that we are some high-tech watchdog. They always thought that we were chosen by the Arilou, selected. They wouldn’t listen to me tell them that we went too far, that we used our technology to such extent as to remove ourselves from the natural order of things. And that is what the Wise Ones had always intended. But now that I’m here, on this miserable blue planet, I think the Arilou were wrong. Because you people are stupid and dangerous on your own. You don’t need a bloodthirsty conquering race, you can destroy yourselves all on your own. The drugs and the violence. You have millions of reasons to kill yourselves that would not be understood anywhere else out of this gravity well. How are you suppose to be the galaxy’s only hope when you can’t even help yourselves? How are you meant to reach ascension if you can’t survive the trip? That’s why I was bashing that guy’s brains out in the alley. Because he was dumb enough to do those drugs and he was right in front of me and he was making me feel like my life, my whole people’s existence, is a waste of fucking space.”
That was when Jack punched him, because he could smell the upholstery starting to smolder.
— The Fire Tiger Chronicles, a work in progress


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Comments

  • Nihau says:

    good work
    keep it up

    only comment:
    star control is based on a perception of the human race which is old fasioned- like in the lensemen.
    there are ppl with noble aspirations and brave hearts who will stand on the side of good unwaveringly and face the war with unshaken determination.

    the universe of star control is not built to include the “sofistication” of the post modernizm where personal interest is the main drive and altruizm is a fake description for interest in disguise.

  • bob says:

    אהבתי.

    *בהתחלה הייתה לזה הרגשה של הסיפור הכללי של סטארגייט.

    *לי אישית מתחיל להמאס מ”המין האנושי – התקווה האחרונה של היקום” אז כדאי שיהיה שם טוויסט מעניין בהמשך.

    *אני לא בטוח בקשר להגהה של המשפט: “They wouldn’t listen to me tell them that we went too far”

    בכל מקרה – בסך הכל זה כתוב יפה ואשמח לקרוא את השאר.

  • Eran says:

    לשם ההסבר…
    1) דבר ראשון, זה הניסוי הראשון בשרשרת הניסויים שלי להוציא את הדברים שמצטברים לי בראש בקשר לפרויקטים הנמצאים במצב של “כן, אני אכתוב ספר כשיהיה לי זמן”.
    2) כן, החייזרים הם מהעולם של Star Control. כן, אני יודע איך הוא נראה ואיך הוא מתנהג. לא, עדיין לא קראתי את Lensmen, אני עוד אגיע לזה. והנטייה שלי באופן כללי, וזה כבר צריך להיות ידוע, זה לשבור כללים.
    3) “המין האנושי – התקווה האחרונה של היקום” is square one. יש לי שלושה טוויסטים הלוך וחזור על זה רק עכשיו בראש. לא, אני לא אכתוב אותם כי הם לא מנוסחים וזה יהיה ספויילר.
    4) אם Word לא טען שזה שגיאת תחביר אני לא מתכוון להתווכח. בטח שלא ב-1 בלילה.

    ותודה על התגובות.

  • Nihau says:

    זה לא נקרא לשבור את הכללים אם אתה מתעלם מהנחות היסוד של העולם עליו אתה כותב ומכניס אליו אלמנטים שאין להם בסיס במקור. זה נקרא לכתוב רע. צר לי.

    וכן, ידוע לי שלפי התיאוריה הזו שלי “מרשעת” הוא ספר שכתוב רע כי הוא מוסיף לעולם של ארץ עוץ אלמנטים של ביקורת פוליטית חברתית מהעולם שלנו שאף פעם לא היו שם ובהחלט לא היו נחוצים. זה אכן ספר רע.

    כדוגמא מייצגת לשבירת כללים סבירה יכול להיות ur-quan או כל נציג יחיד מגזע אחר שעובר צד במלחמה משולשת הצדדים הזו.

  • bob says:

    תשמע, יש שני פירושים אפשריים למשפט הזה:
    “They wouldn’t listen to me. tell them that we went
    “too far
    או לחילופין:
    “They wouldn’t listen to me telling(\when I told) them that we went too far”

    אז כן, הבנתי שמדובר בפירוש השני. אבל לדעתי זה לא ממש ברור…

  • Eran says:

    וזה למה אני משתמש בגזע שאני המצאתי בשביל זה. אני מוסיף על העולם המקורי וכנראה גם אשנה אותו קצת. את הגזע הזה המצאתי עוד כשהייתי נאיבי והמטרה שלי בו הייתה להראות מה היה קורה אם המין האנושי היה מתפתח כמו שאני חושב שנכון.
    ועכשיו, כשאני מבוגר יותר, חכם יותר ומלוח יותר, אני מוסיף קצת רקע, מנפח מניעים ומנסה לבדוק מה דפוק בכל הקונפיגורציה הזאת.

  • Nihau says:

    נו טוף, בהצלחה :)

  • Eran says:

    קחו בחשבון שההודעות האלו הן אפילו לא טיוטה ראשונה, היא מחשבה שהוצאה אל הנייר הדיגיטלי כדי שלא תברח. היצירה הסופית, לא רק שלא תראה ככה, סביר להניח שגם תושפע רבות ממה שיאמר כאן.

  • bob says:

    בשביל זה אני כותב את מה שאני חושב :)